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Unanonymity by Arianna
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Plot
I really liked this. The fact that you've continued the Jess-Rory storyline even after Nag Hammandi's Where They Found the Gnostic Spells, I think, is a better path that the WB has taken. We all hate it when things are left so abruptly, with no closure of any sort, and this story does the exact opposite. It is about Rory and her fears about herself and her actions towards love in the first part, where she calls Jess in California. Her feelings are compared to a person running up a cliff, hang glider in hand, but never quite makes it off. The second part deals with Jess, somehow giving an explanation as to why he does the thing that he does: run. I like the theme of second chances. It's an optimistic idea, but the way Unanonymity is written somehow counters the positive connotation. It ends with an unconventional good-bye, ambiguous for the future of Jess and Rory's relationship, as Rory finally says the L-word, but Jess needing to be on a plane. It's quite sad, but the lyrics in the end gives the reader a small hope for what is to come.
Characterization
I think you've portrayed Rory very well in this story, playing on her frustrations, her nervousness and her fear. She is what she is on the show, but with a more mature twist, because it's rare for her to take the first step towards anything big. I also liked how you addressed her indecisiveness, taking ordering food as an example. Rory IS bad at firm decisions.
Jess is also star-quality in this, from the dialogue to the little fact of him buying a place for his own. It's s simple thing, but the meaning behind it is far more heavy than what it seems. He had planned to stay.
Style/Flow
This piece kind of jumps from Yale to Stars Hollow a bit too fast for me. The first part has Jess still in California, Lily behind him, and then suddenly standing in front of Luke's Diner in the second. But that's about all I had with that, though. Songfics aren't my bag, but for some reason, I still enjoyed this and found the song fitting. Maybe it was because you didn't use a Michelle Branch or Avril Lavigne song. I hate it when people do that.
Structure/Spelling/Grammar
Always the best, never any complaints. :)
Things To Work On
Nothing much, really. I thought this was a solid piece and I very much enjoyed it. One part kind of bugs me though; didn't Jess just come back two times? In Can't Get Started and A Family Matter?
Things That Rocked My Socks
"'Three times, and you had a chance every damn time! But no, you're running away and saying no and it doesn't hurt anyone, right? Just you, when you watch me walk away? Huh. You're still living in that little fairytale of a town and I was there for a while; I know what it's like.'" It's the awful truth, and I like awful truths.
The song is a beautiful choice and a very fitting one, too.
I love the ending as well. It's got closure, but is still ambiguous enough for us to entertain a future get-back-together. Thanks for writing this, Arianna.
Letter Grade
A
Reviewed by:
Oregano
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