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"For you to notice" by Jessica12
Link to Story.
Plot
It's a short one-parter on the events of Haunted Leg. Told in Jess' point of view, it only has the conversation between Rory and him (he?) in Doose's. How he's taking it, etc. A little hint: He's not taking it well.
Characterization
The only character to discuss is Jess, because the only time we hear from Rory is the original dialogue and no one else is mentioned. Jess...he's a tough nut to crack. The show doesn't give us a lot to work with to try to figure out what's inside and this story takes the approach that inside is a boy who's just crumbling from the pain. I'm accepting this because I think Jess is mostly open to interpretation.
Style/Flow
The author follows the same poetry style in all of her stories (that I've read). I think that it flows very nicely, and I like this way of writing. It's a way I would write if I had the talent.
Structure/Grammar/Spelling
There's only one or two grammar mistakes, which is great, considering that English isn't the author's first language.
Things To Work On
Just one teeny tiny thing. A few times, something is written such as ,which I assume is supposed to have a formatting change. It seems like it's usually used for when the person speaking/thinking is trying to emphasize a point, or is "screaming" at themselves. I know what it means, and it wasn't distracting, but it doesn't change the print in any way, so maybe you're looking for a different function (bold? italics? underline?). Anyway, it's no big deal, I've only noticed it before.
Parts That Rocked Our Socks
The whole story was really good. My favorite part? "Convinced that I could drive her out of my heart. As I stood there in the middle of the store, talking to her again, I knew the truth. I had failed."
Grade
A. Good Job.
Reviewed by:
SamiJoe
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