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3x5 by Samantha
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Plot
Another Jess & Rory one-parter. However, this fact is nothing to brush aside. 3x5 is a beautiful take on Rory changing her mind after Jess asks her to come away with him to California for the summer. She hops on a bus and goes after him, ready to deliver a speech written down on an index card--which, in my opinion, is a total Rory-Move. Preparation is the story's theme, and Panic. I love it.
Characterization
Rory is wonderfully done in this story, Samantha. You have everything of hers down pat, from the simple act of over-preparing for something as unpreparable as this. It is just so like her to overthink everything, and try to do something about it, no matter how little power she has over the situation.
Jess, although his appearance is brief, is great as well. The distance he creates between himself and Rory, albeit his shock, is felt at the very moment he sees her. Kickass.
Style/Flow
The story flows very well. You use complex sentences to your advantage, and that helps so much. The style is pretty standard, which isn't a bad thing--don't get me wrong. It compliments the story well. I think I said "well" a little too much...
Structure/Spelling/Grammar
You know what you're doing in this department and I still have no complaints. Errors, if there were any, weren't distracting.
Things To Work On
The ending kind of caught me on a snag. I just thought that the way it was worded was a little abrupt, being the ending of the piece.
"Opening her mouth, she prepared to say what was on her notecard and in her heart. "
It kind of left me hanging, but in a rather bad way, since it is a one-parter. :/
Things That Rocked My Socks
I love how you've portrayed Rory in this. You've captured her insecurity and her panic very, very well. I am super impressed.
The title was also something I liked very much. It's short, but catchy, and I didn't need you to submit it here to have read it. :)
Letter Grade
A, man. Not Amen-- A, man. The ending didn't bug me that much.
Reviewed by:
Oregano
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