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No More Sad Songs by CaliforniaDreamer
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Plot
One of the sweeter Literati fics I've read in a while. It follows the three major turning points of the end of the Rory & Jess era: the bus scene, the "I love you" scene, and the "Come with me" scene. In the end is another turning point, but it's something you've created on your own. And I like it a lot. Jess once again, comes back, leaving Rory to question everything that has taken place long ago.
Each chapter is bordered off with a song. And while I'm not fond of songfics in general, I still thought it fit well. Thank you, thank you, thank you, for not going overboard with the lyrics. Basically, it's a collection of reflective pieces (something you like doing, I notice :) ) on each situation, alternating between Jess and Rory.
Characterization
The first part with Jess is beautiful. You've captured that feeling of him not wanting to leave, but having to. He's sorry, but at the same time, hey, he's Jess.
"I know what I want to say. It isn't enough, but it'll have to do. " Oh, Jess.
Rory and her initial denial of most things factual is great. She's confused, she's angry, and as always, slightly delusional. But at the same time, we see her letting go of something she didn't really want to in the first place when she tears up his note.
The little cameo made by Lorelai, even though it was a brief moment, was still a stellar job. Lots of fics out there go on and on but never really hitting that Lorelai-target. You, however, have got fantastic aim.
Style/Flow
No annoying disruptions in flow, and I like the alternating thing you've done with each chapter. You have this style that is obviously yours, like a signature, with the reflective style.
Structure/Grammar/Spelling
None that I could see. If there were any, it wasn't obvious.
I like the balance within each chapter (the lyrics that bordered them) and the alternating personas within the whole story.
Things To Work On
I notice that you use this internal thing a lot. Although you're doing a fantastic job and may prefer it to most, why not try to dabble on other styles? Maybe a story that's more situation-driven? Something with more dialogue? That transcript/screenplay style?
You don't have to, if you're comfortable with this style. I'm just suggesting trying something different to see how it fits you.
Parts That Rocked My Socks
Lorelai. It was a small part, but I loved her to bits. :)
The last chapter, because it was so much more creative. You used material that really happened on the show, but capped it off with something entirely your own. I love that. But at the same time, you've inserted little things that we didn't see on the show, like the note. Good, good, good job.
You have great characterization. From Rory to Jess, you've captured everything that they would be feeling.
Letter Grade
A+!
Reviewed by:
Oregano
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