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Mistakes by swimchic2
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Plot
Short one-parter set after R&R. It's basically Rory's thoughts on what happened-sleeping with Dean, all that crap with Jess, what she said to Lorelai-before and after the season finale.
Characterization
Wow, I like this Rory. She knows what happened, she knows it was wrong. She regrets it. It's a very good Rory. While she was really, technically, the only person in this fic, others were mentioned. Lorelai, who bought Rory a new mattress. Which I think is nice, because I really do believe that if Rory saw what she'd done, and if she was as miserable as she is in the story, Lorelai would be right there to help her. Lane was also in here, picking up Rory to go to the movies. I think that that's something Lane would do. She's trying to make Rory feel better. Also, Dean, the little scumbag, was also written in. He's with Lindsay. "It's hard to see him though, to see him look at her as though nothing had happened..." That also is something I think Dean would do. If Rory didn't want to continue with him, I think he'd just ignore it. Great characterization.
Style/Flow
Very good. I liked how some of it was just what she thought, but then other parts also informed us of what else was going on around Stars Hollow.
Structure/Grammar/Spelling
All great! I only saw one or two spelling mistakes, tiny ones. Good job.
Things To Work On
Um...nothing? Am I allowed to say that? Don't you dare change a thing.
Parts That Rocked Our Socks
Caitlin, I think this was your best fic yet. At least, the best that I've read. It was so good, and so...it made me sad. But it still ended with an almost happy glimpse of hope. The lines I liked: "It's hard to see him though, to see him look at her as though nothing had happened, when it had. It had happened." I liked that one. To Dean, it wasn't anything. To Lorelai, it was a disappointment. To the town, it was a shock. But to Rory, it was something big, something huge. This was a really important event in her life, and it was ruined. Also, "There is a knock at her door and she plasters on a fake smile. It is very rare to see a genuine one anymore. Everyone knows it, they can see it." Oh. Rory. She has to have fake smiles now. She's trying to make everything okay, when nothing's okay. Everyone knows, and she knows everyone knows, but she's still going to do it, she's still going to keep up appearances.
Grade
A +++.
Reviewed by:
SamiJoe
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