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Out of Context by Angeleyez
Link to story.
Plot
Elise, I don't know why you even bother with us little folk here at No Emo.
Out of Context is about Jess and Rory meeting again after some time has passed, certainly over high school and the teenage drama crap. It's been done before, but something about your style of writing makes it feel new again. Mostly, it is about examining Jess after he has had a transformation of character. His emotional baggage is gone, and all that's left is a man (not boy) in love. However, tragedy comes by for a visit, and both Rory and Jess make do with what they have. I don't want to ruin the ending, but somehow, I think I inadvertantly will. Despite "the ending" being there for dramatic purposes, it just seemed a bit too... soap-opera-esque for me.
Characterization
I love how you've addressed Jess here as a new kind of person. It shows him grown up and not annoyingly riddled with angst. There's a simplicity to him. He is sweeter, more open, and so much nicer to girls. Initially, I thought his inclination for poetry was off-character, but you explain him well. This isn't the same Jess as before, and Rory has had a huge part to play in this metamorphisis.
Rory retains most of herself through the years, but there has to have been something different about her also, to change her mind about Jess. She's wonderfully open, but still a tad childlike, which makes me smile. And given the fact that I never was all too fond of RoryGirl, I'd say this was big.
Style/Flow
There is a distinct style here, where the most obvious is the lack of quotation marks. Usually, this would be wrong, but you've stayed constant throughout the story, which suggests that this wasn't merely a typo. Because of this, it all seems like the story is happening internally, where all the sound happens within them.
You take your time with establishing the characters and then you bring out the big guns. I like it because once you know these characters, you invest in them more.
Structure/Grammar/Spelling
Why should I even put anything here?
Things To Work On
As I've said, the only qualms I have regarding Out of Context is its ending. It was just a bit too dramatic for me.
Parts That Rocked My Socks
Your style is unlike any other, and everyone knows you're a great writer. While reading this, I actually thought to myself that you have the makings of becoming a published writer. With a company affliliation other than FanFiction.Net.
I lovelovelove Jess's character here. It's transformed, but there's reason behind his softness.
Letter Grade
A-
Reviewed by:
Oregano
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